“The Ending,” A Tanka & A Senryu
Thanks for stopping by to check out my Weekly Poetry Challenge where we can write a Haiku, Tanka, Haibun, Cinquain, or a Senryu using the prompt words: mist and shape. To keep things interesting, I kept the word mist but used silhouettes for the word shape.
Forms blending as one
figures outlined in gray mist,
silhouettes shrouded.
Profiles in passion adrift,
contours of a broken heart.
©2017 Colleen M. Chesebro
I can create a Senryu by using synonyms. This time, I used “opaque” for misty, and “manipulation” for the word, shape. The Senryu instructions say to share a personal event. In my poetry, the irony is that the relationship was all about manipulation, not love as the first two lines suggest. Does that make sense?
Here is how I am viewing a Haiku – write about nature. When you write a Senryu, you are writing about love or human emotions with a touch of humor or irony present.
Opaque memories –
Fused in my heart forever,
Manipulation.
©2017 Colleen M. Chesebro
Brava.. 🥀🥀🥀🥀🥀🥀🥀
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Oh, Dorna. You’re such a great support. Thank you. 😘❤️
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Oh, no, Colleen Chesebro, it is I who should say, ‘Thank You for posting so much Great Stuff.’ (@–>–) (@–>–) (@–>–)
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#Haiku Happenings #9: Colleen’s #tanka and senryu response to her weekly poetry challenge!
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Thanks for sharing, Frank. ☺️
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My pleasure, Colleen!
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Nicely done, Colleen!
I like “opaque memories,” the memories that are shaded or not fully remembered, or misty in time. . . 🙂
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Thanks, Merril. I struggled with the word misty. The synonyms were fun to play with for both words.
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Perfectly obvious, which means, you are a terrific teacher! Thank you for the encouragement to stretch ourselves, combined with the amazing lessons. ❤
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Thanks. It helps to explain it so we can all try Senryu. ❤️
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These are lovely Colleen.
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Thanks, Colline. It clears the mind. 😀
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I like your word choices of the synonyms. I especially like opaque, one of my favorite colors. great demonstration of the new poem form, Colleen!
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Thanks, Miriam. I encourage the use of synonyms because it can change the meaning of your poetry in an instant. 😀 ❤
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I do use a rhyme website to have more options of the word choices. It surprised me sometimes! 🙂
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That’s great. I use the website: How Many Syllables. ❤
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The website I use Rhyme Zone that has 20 functions, quite helpful. 🙂
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Oh, yes. I’ve used them before. 😀
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I’ll look up the site that you use!
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It’s excellent. Here is the link:https://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/finally. Click on the workshop tab and type in your Haiku, Senryu, or Tanka. It counts the syllables for you. ❤
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Oh, wonderful! I don’t have to count fingers any more! 🙂
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LOL! True. 😀
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I remember a Japanese teacher teaching Cinquain to her 2nd grade class. She teaches Haiku also. I taught my classes how to count syllables by counting the vowels. Actually counting syllables is part of the on-going learning well into 4th grade.
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I loved creative writing and poetry in school and college. The Japanese forms have always appealed to me. I did accounting for years as a bookkeeper. I think it is the order and the rules that I like. LOL! Cinquain is fun for adults because they have to think about the directions – kids too! 😀
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I enjoy organization. So after teaching for 18 years, I got to do school administration for 10 years before I retired. My sisters and my daughter are good in organization also – special thing about girls in our family. I did two or three Villanette and one Pantoum. They are highly structured poem forms. I enjoyed doing those also. This is my second year taking poetry at OLLI (Osher Lifelong Learning Institute), a program for the retirees held at State Univs in 26 (?) states. The class members mostly write free verse!
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I would love for to do a guest post on my blog about some of these advanced poem forms. The Villanelle and Pantoum forms are fascinating. I love poetry. ❤
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Yes, my daughter ha all the nurser rhymes memorized. She is not writing poems ar this time. When she post her photography on social media and make comments, it does show her poetic expressions. I sing. The classical lyrics are very poetic.
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Thank you, Michael. Much appreciated. ❤
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They flow so beautifully! (K)
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Thank you. ❤
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I love your diverse forms of poetry, Colleen. Congratulations on your ever expanding list of followers.
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Aren’t these poetry challenges fun? I’ve really enjoyed them. Hugs to you, Viva. ❤
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Love these, Colleen. 🙂
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Thanks, Judy. Hugs! ❤
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I can see the irony here. Great choice of words in this sense: contour, figures outlined. mist… silhouettes. Most times, appearances deceive us… Quite funny that we need to go through it all to finally acknowledge it 😉 Love & best wishes dear Colleen! 🙂
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Thank you! I chose the words carefully to convey that message. Perception is interesting and part of human nature. Many times we only see what we want to see, not the truth. ❤ Hugs, dear friend. ❤
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Thank you my friend. 😀 A huge smile of thanks.
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My pleasure 🙂
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I just found you in spam, Mick, along with your other comments. What the heck? 😦
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I don#t understand ether? Out of interest do any them contain lins?
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The annoying thing is unless I check back to see if my comments have been delivered, via a page refresh I am non the wiser., Apparently other folk are having the same problem!
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WP must be working on the progam again.
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Must be!
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Reblogged this on Mick E Talbot Poems and commented:
your prompts inspire
your poetry… all lessons
Fairy Queen Colleen
determination
inspiring all to write
Colleen the teacher
the mist of dawn and dusk
natural phenomena… lush
beware deception
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How lovely, Mick. No deception, here… just me, being me. 😀
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Hey I wasn’t cating aspirations, I was referring to the mist hiding dangers! Perhaps I better look at the wording ii it can be taking that way.?
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3rd time I replied to this? Wasn’t casting aspersions, referring to the mist concealing hidden dangers 🙂
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REplied to your last comment twice and again told I have replied but they’re not here? (no links in them, so why are they going into spam?
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I have to approve my comments, Mick. Today, I found a bunch of your comments in spam. 😦
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I am going to check my spam just to see if I am missing comment too…
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I have to remember to do this every day.
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Ohhh, thank you! 😀
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🙂
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