“The Ending,” A Tanka & A Senryu

Posted on by Colleen M. Chesebro

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Thanks for stopping by to check out my Weekly Poetry Challenge where we can write a Haiku, Tanka, Haibun, Cinquain, or a Senryu using the prompt words: mist and shape. To keep things interesting, I kept the word mist but used silhouettes for the word shape.

Forms blending as one

figures outlined in gray mist,

silhouettes shrouded.

Profiles in passion adrift,

contours of a broken heart.

©2017 Colleen M. Chesebro

I can create a Senryu by using synonyms. This time, I used “opaque” for misty, and “manipulation” for the word, shape. The Senryu instructions say to share a personal event. In my poetry, the irony is that the relationship was all about manipulation, not love as the first two lines suggest. Does that make sense?

Here is how I am viewing a Haiku – write about nature. When you write a Senryu, you are writing about love or human emotions with a touch of humor or irony present.

Opaque memories –

Fused in my heart forever,

Manipulation.

©2017 Colleen M. Chesebro

58 thoughts on ““The Ending,” A Tanka & A Senryu”

          7. I remember a Japanese teacher teaching Cinquain to her 2nd grade class. She teaches Haiku also. I taught my classes how to count syllables by counting the vowels. Actually counting syllables is part of the on-going learning well into 4th grade.

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          8. I loved creative writing and poetry in school and college. The Japanese forms have always appealed to me. I did accounting for years as a bookkeeper. I think it is the order and the rules that I like. LOL! Cinquain is fun for adults because they have to think about the directions – kids too! 😀

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          9. I enjoy organization. So after teaching for 18 years, I got to do school administration for 10 years before I retired. My sisters and my daughter are good in organization also – special thing about girls in our family. I did two or three Villanette and one Pantoum. They are highly structured poem forms. I enjoyed doing those also. This is my second year taking poetry at OLLI (Osher Lifelong Learning Institute), a program for the retirees held at State Univs in 26 (?) states. The class members mostly write free verse!

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          11. Yes, my daughter ha all the nurser rhymes memorized. She is not writing poems ar this time. When she post her photography on social media and make comments, it does show her poetic expressions. I sing. The classical lyrics are very poetic.

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  11. I can see the irony here. Great choice of words in this sense: contour, figures outlined. mist… silhouettes. Most times, appearances deceive us… Quite funny that we need to go through it all to finally acknowledge it 😉 Love & best wishes dear Colleen! 🙂

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