Day Five: Fog, Elegy, Metaphor
I knew when you were gone it would be hard to see you again –
ever in that same way.
I cried when you made the choice to leave.
I let you go like silken strands slipping from my waiting arms
blowing in a heavy breeze.
I felt your presence leave as my heart tried so hard to cleave.
I knew our time was past, our days were gone. We were through.
I sighed and let the memories of you flow like a gentle rain
through a fog of tears and forever pain.
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I am not sure that I understand the elegiac couplets, so this is my humble offering instead.
Thank you all for your encouragement and inspiration!
From my little understanding, this fits an elegy ;). Beautiful written, i felt the emotions even with the metaphors. 🙂
Did you find this challenging? I just was not sure on the elegy or the couplets. Thank you for your support, you made me feel much better about it. <3
I actually haven’t gotten around to writing it yet. Had a busy day, but would try and complete it. 🙂
Lovely. I love poetry I just wish I was better at writing poems. A poet is a very rare and splendid artist.
Thank you for the compliments. I just let the feelings come out and the words flow. You should try it. You might surprise yourself. <3
I’m trying to write a few poetic ditties on my blog with my photography. It’s fun to try. 🙂
Good for you! I love Haiku. You use few words and gain a magnificent meaning. Ronovan Writes does a weekly Haiku challenge. You should get involved. https://ronovanwrites.wordpress.com/category/haiku-prompt-challenge/ 🙂
Thanks so much. will look into that. 🙂
This is nicely penned… you’ve used the metaphors very effectively… 🙂
Thank you. I just am never quite sure. 🙂
Colleen, you have no idea how much this touches me.
Thank you Erika. <3
You are so welcome! 💖
Erika, this stuff just pours out of me sometimes. I just let the emotions go and write. <3
That is what I appreciate so much about you, Colleen. You feel so authentic! ❤
I am so humbled. You are a special friend. Thank you. 💖
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Beautifully bittersweet. 🙂
Thank you. I think elegy is a hard form to write.
Beautiful, full of feeling but quite visual too.
Thank you. 😊
Very moving piece. We have all had to let someone go. Thanks for the sweet reminder. Van
Thank you Van.
Lovely! I haven’t finished mine. Actually I don’t fully understand about the elegiac couplet, it’s a bit difficult.
I thought so to. 😕
I love your poem. Hope your are having a wonderful weekend.
More painting. The kitchen today 😕 It will be fab to have it all done. I hope you have a great weekend. Do something fun. 💖
Fun today involves reading and watching the beautiful snowfall.
That sounds nice. 🍵☕📖📕💜
Lovely and sad elegy. Well written. <3
Thank you. 💖
OH this is good, but sad!
Thank you. 😊
Nicely done Colleen. It’s quite Shakespearean in a ‘Parting is such sweet sorrow’ way.
xxx Huge Hugs xxx
David, thank you. How lovely a comparison is that? 💖